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How It All Began 23 Conclusion

 

Damn that was fast Nikki thought to herself as she heard someone knocking on the door. She reached for her purse and opened the door “How much is it?” she said to the back facing her as she rummaged through her purse looking for change. “Your life!” “I’m sorry what was that?” Nikki looked up still facing a back and repeated herself standing with two twenty dollar bills in her hand. “I’m sorry how much did you say?” To her surprise the man standing before her had a gun in his hand. “If you scream I will kill you and everybody else in this damn house.” Thinking to her sister Nikki stayed quiet. Now turn around and walk in the house. As soon as she turned around she spotted the African statue of a pregnant woman sitting on her table and thought to grab for it. Her thoughts must have spoken through her movements because Rick gun butted her in the back of the head and she fell to the floor. “Baby what the hell are you doing out here? I hope you getting ready fro daddy?” Rick looked up and saw Lee and they’re eyes met. “What the fuck did you do?” Lee screamed as the tears began to fall from his eyes, he dropped to his knees and placed Nikkis head on his lap while stroking it and crying he repeated “baby, wake up, wake up please baby wake up” “Leave that bitch alone she aint worth all that crying and shit. How could you want that when you got a real nigga like me that would ride or die for you.” Lee stood to his feet and walked over to Rick and fro a moment Rick was actually scared but shook it off, he knew lee would never do anything to hurt him. Just then lee knocked the gun out of his hands and punched him in the face. The two began fighting while the gun flew on the steps.
 
In his car T decided to make a U-Turn and go back to Nikkis house it had to be a sign their song was playing he knew tonight was the night how could he not be there with her on a night like tonight and if anything he needed to be there for Precious she was really having a tough time dealing with this. T sang along as the song played:
Girl I can feel it 
When I hold you in my arms
The feeling is not the same
And I'd be the one to blame
I don't want to lose your love (hmmm)
I don't wanna say bye-bye (oh nooo)
True love is so hard to find
And it's right between your lips and mine...and mine
Before I let go...
Before I let you go away
(Can I get a kiss?)
Can I get a kiss goodnight?
(Baby, before I go can get a kiss goodnight?)
Before I let you go away
(Oh baby baby)
Before I let you go away
Can I get a kiss goodnight?
Listen baby...)
 
Turn the lights down low
Let's take it nice and slow
My mission is to keep you mine
Don't want this to be the last time
We'll make sweet love baby
I know you'll feel it too
It's bigger than the both of us
There's one thing I so certain of:
 
“Motherfucker I told you it was 
over and I didn’t want to do this gay shit 
anymore.” “Nigga you love me you can’t let 
go of what we had just like that you know you 
want this. She can’t eat your ass like I can I should have just 
killed that bitch when I had the chance!” With that 
Lee went bizerk, he through Rick off of him and 
picked the gun up off the steps and held it up to 
him backing up he tripped over the coffee table 
and fell where Nikki had once been laying. 
He runs to the kitchen to find Nikki standing there 
with blood leaking from the back of her head 
with her gun drawn ready to shoot. Lee follows 
suit and has his gun pointed at Rick. Nikki has her 
gun pointed as Rick as well “Get on your knees 
you dick sucking faggot.” “Nikki baby wait I 
can explain.” Lee tried to say but Nikki pointed 
her gun at him. “You I don’t believe you, you 
tried to make me feel bad all these years for 
cheating on you with your brother so long ago 
and aborting the baby. It was not my fault I was 
young and looking for a come up. I could not 
change that he got killed two weeks later. That 
had nothing to do with me and hear you come 
back in my life making me feel that all has been 
forgiven and the past was the past and we could 
start a life together and YOU’VE BEEN 
SUCKING DICK AND EATING ANOTHER
 NIGGAS ASS. YOU NASTY BASTARD!” 
Rick took this as his chance and grabbed for the 
gun he had tucked in his shoe and shot Nikki in 
the chest and she fell to the floor holding her chest. 
 Lee eyes wide shot Rick two times in the head and
 he died instantly. All that was heard was another 
two gunshots and Lee fell to the floor. T ran over 
and grabbed Nikki up in his arms and ran outside 
and stood while he heard the ambulance coming. 
T got in the ambulance with Nikki and rode with 
her to the hospital holding her hand vowing to never
leave her side.
 Two years later Precious graduated from High School 
a year early and attended SpelmanCollege. Although 
her best friend and her boyfriend getting killed scarred
her it only made her stronger. She is now dating a sophomore 
at MorehouseCollege and is presently on the Deans list. Nikki 
and Terrance on the other hand are expecting their first child and 
will be married in the fall. They remain best friends and lovers and 
have only been brought closer.
 HEY FAM I HOPE YOU ENJOYED 
IT! I KNOW IT WAS MAD LONG BUT
 I HAD TO FINISH THIS UP!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE
 GIVE ME SOME FEEDBACK!!!!!!
 
Comments
courious,
ok............ well you rushed it but I can understand why, you have been doing this for a while BUT I guess this is the happily ever after part. Thanks for finishing it.
2009-01-22 16:08:46
wow,
that the big conclusion we were waiting on? wow!!
2009-01-22 16:10:35
KING PEN,
I LOVED IT MA! GREAT ENDING.....I LIKE HOW YOU TOLD ABOUT THEIR LIVEZ AFTER THE TRAGEDY. SOMETHING GOOD COULD DOME FROM SOMETHING BAD. I LOOK FORWARD TO READIN ANYTHING ELSE YOU COME UP WIT. MUCH LOVE....1.


2009-01-22 16:17:14
KING PEN,
WHY WAS THEY TRYIN TO KILL NIKKI? YOU GOT SOME EXPLAININ TO DO....LMAO! I GUEZZ I WILL GET THE REST OVER THE PHONE....LOL! I FEEL SPECIAL....LOL
2009-01-22 16:19:23
HEY KP!,
Yall is fucking? Why you two are speaking over the phone like that? Punk ass!
2009-01-22 16:26:30
@ DUMB ASS KP!,
If you were such a damn fan you would have known that they were trying to kill Nikki because another man was in love with her new man.. Her new man was a butt chaser, a DL brotha, a ass licker, AND ended up with a crazed idiot who was jealous of Nikki's man's love for her instead of him. DAMN you are corny!
2009-01-22 17:00:04
WOW,
I love the ending....I'm glad that everybody was able to move on with their lives after all that damn craziness, LOL...I think you are a talented writer and you should think about starting up another story, you are definitely one of my fav writers on the site...
2009-01-22 17:34:28
KING PEN,
JUST LOOK AT THIS FEMALE ACTIN AZZ NIGGA....LMAO! I don't know no nigga that sit up and worry about the next man all day. What type of straight nigga alwayz hollorin about another nigga style? Bitch u love my style that's why yo female gay azz stay focused on me. If you didn't I wouldn't even be on yo radar bitch nigga. Now make it make sense hoe
2009-01-22 18:45:32
KING PEN,
But since you wanna stalk me thru dlc and worry about me, I got a job for u. You can be my personal mr. Bentley. U know like diddy got? Ok bentley ur first assignment, lay down on that pile of shit so I can walk pass, then after that go find mother devine and like her azz. When u done holla back so I can tell u what I want u to do next. NO BEAT IT BITCH AND DON'T COME BACK TILL U DO WHAT YO MASTER SAID!
2009-01-22 18:49:07
iQon,
I'm talking spa bags and fly pads and rooms at the Bloomberg And rumors u on the verge of a new marriage 'Cuz that rock on ur finger's like a tumor
U can't fit ur hand in ur new purse

It's humorous to me they watchin' and wii just yachtin' Island hoppin' off the Amalfi coast
Mafioso, Hov baby u ever see SATURN?
No, not the CAR, but everywhere wii are(iQonsWorld.com)

U sure to see StARS, this is HIGH LEVEL(Voyager) not eye level My bezzle courtesy of Audemars
I'll order urs tomorrow now looQ at the time I saved ya.......kp lemme UPGRADE Juuuu....!!!

Just when u thinQ u had it all
Big ends, car notes, collectin' cars
Picture ur life elevated with me
Make u my project celebrity
I keep ur name hot in the streets..

(It's the little glimpse of light)
That makes the diamond really shiiiiiiiiine
And u already is a STAR but unless ur flawless
Then ur dynasty ain't complete without a chief like meeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!..

iQon!










2009-01-22 22:22:38
Feedback,
Hi I thought the story was okay. A couple of things..I think that honestly you should proofread your work before you post it. The second thing is, as the momentum builds with the story your work is not descriptive enough. There are a few gaps in between events one minute someone is shot the next the ambulance is there and the story is over. It just seems abrupt. But keep writing and try to polish your style up. Thanks!
2009-01-23 03:41:53
hmmmmmm,
No that Iqon-ic dude is definately a stalker! and yeah you could have done a lot more author for this story ending. But whatever.
2009-01-23 08:45:17
I Think....,
The conclusion was a little rushed. I think that there should have been more to it. But i do love the fact she included their lives after all the bull. Over all a great read.

@KP & IQon,

Don't do this to our girl. She is looking for feedback not all this back and forth. It seems like the beef is starting to overshadow the conclusion of a great story. And KP I now you have more sense than to feed into this dude. All he ever does is write lyrics to songs someone else sang. Hes not original.
2009-01-23 08:58:51
Honey,
Hey I'm glad you finished, but I too think you rushed the ending. But with how things are on here now, I don't really blame you. Hell we would have enjoyed that in at least 3 more installments....LOL But maybe I'm just being selfish. Nobody is posting stories anymore even me, so I just want to have something to look for. Enjoyed the story though!!!!
2009-01-23 09:11:13
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