I've been posting "You Think You Know...But" here for a little over a month and have been pleased by the respones that I have gotten. I was glancing through the post with the most views and responses and found that the love scenes got the most responses and reads. I have a few questions for all of those who have been following the story from the beginning and who honestly enjoy the story.

Do you think that I should steer more toward the erotic when trying to sell this book, which would mean my implantig much more sex into this work than there is now? I am also considering sending this book to Zane's Publishing Agency. It is right around the corner in Largo, MD and even though they are backlogged, I think I could get farther with them than anyone else that I've tried, but I'm worried that there's not enough sex in the book for her agency. I don't know because I'm not a Zane fan, but my sister is and is convinced that this story would be perfect for her agency.

I'm at the crossroads ladies and gentlemen and would really appreciate your help on this one. I've got another fifty pages to go so I'm fairly close to the end and it's getting time to make some real decisions about what I'm going to do to get this thing published or if I should even be trying to. Any and all responses are welcomed, even the really nasty ones, lol.

MsBooButter

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dont doubt your original design,

If you want to sell written porno...then be more explicit. It depends on the kind of writer you want to be. Your story is somewhere along the line of Omar Tyree Flyy Girl and Coldest Winter ever by Sister Souljah. With a little tweeking and consistency you can have a good seller on your hands. Develop your characters more. Of course you are going to get more responses bout your sex scenes...look what type of site this is. it's a downlow confessions spin off. If your are a truly gifted writer (and you are talented) you should be able to sell your story without lacing it with sex every other page. As you can see from the various authors on this site, anyone can write a really nasty sex scene but that doesnt make there story any good. Your story is the only one I read on here for the very reason it isnt just sex. its life. And life is more than just sex.

2009-04-19 23:15:36

Naw ,

Not really the actions that lead up to tha love scene makes the love scenes better. Jusr straight up rabbit fuckin wit no substance behind it makes tha storey seem like a low budget porn. I 4 one did not leave that many comments on tha non-erotic post cause u had me fiendin for tha next part. Tha sex scene was like bustin a nut I just couldn't keep my thoughts to maself no mo'. But keep up tha good work I like tha fact that I can keep up because u give us good information and background

2009-04-19 23:26:52

Thanks,

Omar Tyree's Flyy Girl, huh...I would be compared to a book I didn't like, lol, but I get what you are saying. I would like to know what you mean by consistency, though.

I'm trying something new with this story and don't want to develop the characters too much, because doing so would allow the reader to easily guess what was going to happen next. The less the reader knows about what kind of person they are reading about the least likely they are to know what the character's next move would be.

Plus this story is a testament to the fact that everyone plays the good guy sometimes and everyone plays the bad guy sometimes. It is life's circumstances that determine which one we will be and when.

Thanks for your critiques.

2009-04-20 00:50:24

Renee Bills,

hey gurl.. i dont think this is a Zane book but it can make with Triple Crown Publications... you know i love your stories it just gets better and better ...keep it up !

2009-04-20 08:37:13

MissLala,

i have been reading it form the begining and i am in love with it!!! I would say try zane all they could do is say no and i would love to buy this book!! Oh yeah more sex would be cool but its fine the way it is!! Thanks for giving me somethind to do when its slow @ work!!

2009-04-20 08:49:44

courious,

I think you should keep it going the same way you have been doing... Zane is not the only one that can get you started. Try lookin up the publishing companies that are listed on the last page of your favorite books and send your stuff into there. BUT if you do decide to go more erotic then sure why not.. give more details to that Sasha and Jay relationship as well as the others.. but be sure to space it out enough to keep it classy. Good Luck!

2009-04-20 11:31:51

MsBooButter,

Strebor's Publishing (Zane) handles other genre of writing too. Zane's own books just lean toward the erotic. I think I'm going to just keep it going like it is.

I may try an erotic on just for this site later though. Thanks for your opinions.

2009-04-20 11:37:20

Explanation,

Flyy Girl was the shit, LOL. Im not saying give us every detail/secret of the characters-but allow your readers to get to know/identify with them. Make your readers see something in the different characters they can relate to. Consistency....the whole sasha thing was confusing. When she and robin confronted jay, i thought she didnt have a clue he was married. Then it was revealed she did and she plotted the whole thing. But what threw me off was the convo between her and jay in the condo before robin appeared. if both jay and sasha knew he was married, than the whole dialog between them two at that moment was inconsistent with the rest of the story.

2009-04-20 13:34:15

MzKeepItReal,

Like with any book they are going to tweak it a bit to make it into a novel, but I really have enjoyed your story and I think it is fine the way it is. Never doubt what you have worked hard to create. If you're fan base on here likes where its going and most importantly if YOU are satisfied with what you have then I say go for it. Zane has books not based just on Sex. She has a book called Breaking the Cycle.. Its sad and has nothing to do with sex.. so you should go for it and they are right, all Zane can do is say no.

2009-04-20 16:18:55

GABRIELLE TERRY,

i love your story. i would say leave it the way it is. remember that when you submit your work they will make you change most of it to what the want anyway

2009-04-20 16:45:23

Its Great,

I have been following the story since day 1. I think it is great, more sex is okay but you should know how to place it. You can go into more sex detail with Nikki and Justice after the birthday party and with Nikki and her husband having sex at Tia's house, but other than that more sex is not needed.

2009-04-20 18:13:27

MsBooButter,

The story is not inconsistent. I have purposely made some things confusing i.e. the Sasha/Jay situation...which one is telling the truth and for that matter what is the truth? The extent of Sasha's knowledge amounts to another twist in our story.

This story is supposed to read like you're peeping in on these people's lives. I don't want the reader to be able to relate to any one character because it would be too easy to see things from only one point of view. Nikki, for instance, had everyone on her side during the beginning of the story, but now she is one of the more disliked characters in the story. Same for Robin. Just hang in there with me and I promise the inconsistencies will be made consistent. Hence the title "You Think You Know...But" Every time you think you know you find out you don't.

Gabrielle, you are so right, but before I let someone pick apart my story, I'd publish it myself. I'd be like E. Lynn Harris selling books out of my trunk, lol.

2009-04-20 21:27:40

Brown,

stay true to yourself....

2009-04-21 21:21:09

mz.louis vuitton,

Ummmm ok whats up with installment 31 etc.

2009-05-04 14:36:09

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