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Til' Death--Chapter 1

Lamiya~~

Chapter 1--Lethal

Before me and Summit even got together he killed for me. Literally. Maybe that should have been the first sign that i shouldnt have gotten in that deep with him but i let my mind rule over my brain. Whenever i would here people use that phrase people always use your heart or your mind, and all that is true but you also need to listnen to your BRAIN. Its all youve got.

Lethal--

The wind blew dangerously making my hair slice across my face. It was like the world was mad at me. The rain was hard and icy, the wind blew raging around me, and even the traffic was against me tho i was on foot. The rule was, you never look behind you when your trying to escape. But who was i running from? I didnt  even remember any more, so i slowed my pace and turn around for a second not looking down or around me. There he was. Dame chasin after me. His face was contorted into some demonic expression and he was runnin fast enough to float.

Somewhere along the alley i had lost my balance. i should have gotten up but i lay there in the frigid cold. my Brain telling me this was the end. As Dame approached my layed out sillohette a whimper managed to escape from my lips. His Wrinkled hands slowly slid around my neck in a tight grip and he leaned my face into his chest. i could feel his hand reach for his gun and the tears came..

"Ask god for forgiveness. Tell him to cradle your soul and forgive you for the things youve done" Dame whispered.

The cold sensation of his Small Saw-off shotgun touched the temple of my head, and my body buckled.

"I forgive you Little Nikita..But god." Dame stammered

i slowly pried my head form his grip and looked Dame in his eyes.

"Papa,Papa please..I wont tell". I pleaded.

He leaned in and kissed my forhead one last time and we bothed reached out and gripped each others long wet hair. He sat up and looked me in my eyes, clocked the gun shut,squinted his eyes close...

......

The sound of a gun in the most deafening thing that you could ever here up close. I opened my eyes body trembling and he was there. we stared at each other eye to eye, threw the hole in my fathers head.. Dames body quaked and quivered a little. The whole moment of his collapse seemed to move in slow motion. His body floated backwards and instead of landing hard he landed with a soft pat. Hsi hair flaring out aroudn him intricately around him like Lethal Rose Petals on The Enemies Stem.

His hand reached for me and i frantically crawled away from him...From Summit...From My Hero...My Lover...My Killer...

 
Comments
MiSs t ,
dammmmmm...i guess i was right ....she felt dead!....please continue!
2009-03-05 12:35:19
hey,
look here you can't start like that and not have the next posting and stop typing so fast. i know your typing fast because i do it and mess up words.
2009-03-05 13:16:44
shortymac,
quit complaing geesh what do you expect! If you wanted perfect read a freeking book! Some people! Neva satisfied. This was awesome ....Heck read to fast to notice any messed up words.
2009-03-05 13:54:41
courious,
ummmmmmmm..... ok it was good but I am a little confused..
2009-03-05 16:43:29
MzKeepItReal,
Ok.. Here's the thing.. I like the concept of the story.. I'm gonna support you... A bit of constructive criticism.. Proofread a million times before you post.. LOL.. i know how it feels to have a thought in your mind and just wanna get it down before you forget it.. But once its down proofread.. and your readers will be happy.. Try and keep posting at least once a week, don't be like the rest of us(me included) lol and stop coming around for a while.. But it looks like a great read.. Can't wait for the next article.. You're just starting, you can only get better with each chapter.. GOOD LUCK SWEETIE!!
2009-03-05 23:50:13
MzKeepItReal,
Ok.. Here's the thing.. I like the concept of the story.. I'm gonna support you... A bit of constructive criticism.. Proofread a million times before you post.. LOL.. i know how it feels to have a thought in your mind and just wanna get it down before you forget it.. But once its down proofread.. and your readers will be happy.. Try and keep posting at least once a week, don't be like the rest of us(me included) lol and stop coming around for a while.. But it looks like a great read.. Can't wait for the next article.. You're just starting, you can only get better with each chapter.. GOOD LUCK SWEETIE!!
2009-03-05 23:50:13
ruth,
dang...........yea ok i see where yall commin from so ill start over..write it out before i type it and then submit it to yall...and keep yall posted...THANKS for the comments tho
2009-03-17 11:30:56
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